Bent Sea
Heaven in a Sea-Bird. Another written by me.?
Heaven in a Sea-Bird
I’m gliding over the sea
My life flashes before me
Like the waves break on the beach
Relationships breaks and teach
Still soring my wings are spred
I grin at the life I led
Turbulent sea, hard to see
The lies told too me; by me
I endure the salty wind
My path in life never to bend
Flying high along a cliff
Guided by the rock so stiff
Dive deep into the cold sea
Eyes closed, too tight to see thee
Lost the catch, perhaps the one
Breach! I will try again soon
Gliding over the tide
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Like the break of waves upon the sand
Relationships break and teach
Still sore, my wings are spread
My past laid before me
Turbulent waters, as do the storm blinds
By my lies; I am deceived
I taste the wind
My path binds
The cliff marks my ascension
The chill of stone paves the way
Into the depth, ice cold
Shut tight, eyes unseeing
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*denotes 'I don't know what to do with this line'
I reworked your lines to the best of my ability, keeping as close to the original meaning as possible.
Just some suggestions to changes you might want to consider.
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LARGE CASTELLO FULL BENT "HAND MADE" SEA ROCK -- RARE & PRISTINE ! ! ! $98.00 |
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Mustad Fishing Hooks Round Bent Sea 2326 Sz 20 Qty 500 $5.98 |
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Blenko Winslow Anderson 948 Sea Green Bent Neck Art Glass Decanter with Stopper $40.00 |
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Sea Gull Lighting Bent Glass Wall Sconce 4455-15 $50.00 |
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E-Flite Bent Wire Struts,Retracts: Sea Fury 400 ARF EFL6062 $2.99 |
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10 PACKS FLADEN MAXXIMUS BENT JIG SEA HOOKS ALL SIZES $25.28 |
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10 PACKS FLADEN MAXXIMUS BENT JIG SEA HOOKS ALL SIZES $28.44 |
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10 PACKS FLADEN MAXXIMUS BENT JIG SEA HOOKS ALL SIZES $32.39 |
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10 PACKS FLADEN MAXXIMUS BENT JIG SEA HOOKS ALL SIZES $35.87 |
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10 PACKS FLADEN MAXXIMUS BENT JIG SEA HOOKS ALL SIZES $35.87 |
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10 PACKS FLADEN MAXXIMUS BENT JIG SEA HOOKS ALL SIZES $41.08 |
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10 PACKS FLADEN MAXXIMUS BENT JIG SEA HOOKS ALL SIZES $50.57 |
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Bent Glass 1-Light Bath Lighting 4.5" W Sea Gull Lighting 4449-15 $25.00 |
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Bent Glass 4-Light Bath Lighting 24" W Sea Gull Lighting 4455-15 $50.00 |
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Bent Glass Ceiling Lighting 14.75" W Sea Gull Lighting 7355-15 $27.00 |
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Bent Glass Ceiling Lighting 12" W Sea Gull Lighting 7353-15 $21.00 |
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Bent Glass Ceiling Lighting 11.75" W Sea Gull Lighting 7452-15 $19.00 |
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Sea Gull Lighting Bent Glass Wall Sconce 4449-15 $25.00 |
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UK Fishing Tackle Bent Gneat x100 Sea Fishing Tackle $7.89 |
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UK Fishing Tackle Bent Gneat x300 Sea Fishing Tackle $23.69 |
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E-flite Bent Wire Struts,Retracts: Sea Fury 400 ARF $2.99 |
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Mustad Fishing Hooks Round Bent Sea 2335X Sz 20 Qty 200 $13.99 |
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Mustad Fishing Hooks Round Bent Sea 2326 Sz 20 Qty 500 $11.99 |
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Bent E-Clips for Rigs Sea, Boat, Beach Fishing $3.95 |
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Bent E-Clips for Rigs Sea, Boat, Beach Fishing $6.24 |